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"The massive rigid frame airship (97 feet shorter then the Titanic) sunk off Big Sur more the 71 years ago during a storm after a high-altitude transcontinental flight damaged her tail section."

I think you meant requires swaping "storm" and "high-altitude transcontinental flight"

But let me add I really like this blog :)
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according to the style manual, your sentence part:
high-altitude transcontinental flight damaged her tail section

suggests that the high-altitude flight caused the damage, and the storm is an ancillary fact, like that fact that people on board were wearing shoes.

from the wiki, i'd say it's about 75%/25% that the storm was the cause, and the high altitude was an effect of the storm, so the sentence would need to be rewritten to place blame on the storm.

whatever. i learned something and would like to see that vid on the discovery channel, so i say the sentence is fine as written. this tiny box i'm typing in, and the fact that my password is in some alien language that i will never remember, are both things that need more work than the article.]]>Sep 29th 2006 12:33AM